Remember thet one-off religion I did?

Aurora Aurora · 2018-07-10 19:58:30

Well I like to write in the bible now and then and I want you to look at it and give me some notes. Thanks.

And yes, I made an OHOL bible for a one-off joke religion.

https://www.wattpad.com/574204314-is-th … e-or-is-it

YAHG · 2018-07-10 20:14:54

I liked it. Ty for sharing.

I think most of it doesn't really explain much lot of disconnected stuff more like a folk tale.
Most of the more modern religions try to teach some sort of way of living to their followers.
The older ones tend to have interplay between the God figures themselves to try to teach lessons about interpersonal relationships or to try to explain the state of the world.

I think it lacked any sort of plot. There wasn't really any conflict other than MAYBE the brother sister thing with the blood.
But then again the brother suffers no consequences for being tricked so it is kinda just a let down.

Aurora Aurora · 2018-07-10 20:16:53

YAHG wrote:

I liked it. Ty for sharing.
I think most of it doesn't really explain much lot of disconnected stuff more like a folk tale.
Most of the more modern religions try to teach some sort of way of living to their followers.
The older ones tend to have interplay between the God figures themselves to try to teach lessons about interpersonal relationships or to try to explain the state of the world.
I think it lacked any sort of plot. There wasn't really any conflict other than MAYBE the brother sister thing with the blood.
But then again the brother suffers no consequences for being tricked so it is kinda just a let down.

ITS NOT DONE YET. THE MESSAGE IS COMING.

YAHG · 2018-07-10 20:18:32

I was expecting the part with the horse to involve rape.. You went a different direction with that part.

There is also a troubling lack of incest in this piece

Aurora Aurora · 2018-07-10 20:19:56

YAHG wrote:

I was expecting the part with the horse to involve rape.. You went a different direction with that part.
There is also a troubling lack of incest in this piece

Shit. Ive forgotten the incest. Gotta work on that.

YAHG · 2018-07-10 20:23:01

I'm prolly gonna have to write Catechisms of the Allfather, now that you are showing me up and all

Aurora Aurora · 2018-07-10 20:24:42

YAHG wrote:

I'm prolly gonna have to write Catechisms of the Allfather, now that you are showing me up and all

Im going to pretend I know what that means!

MegaLlama · 2018-07-11 11:05:58

Maybe I should start a rival religion to this, write my own holy book

TheRedBug · 2018-07-11 13:00:07

As the master of the stew, i shall accept multiple religions within my area.
All members of a society has the right in believing in anything.

For the people are judged by their actions, not their thoughts.
And if their actions lead them to eating a fresh bowl of stew, i shall be happy.

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